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Are higher taxes or lower taxes better for society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#taxes #society
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It is an indisputable
fact
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 that
taxes
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 have some merits and demerits for the
population
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. The
amount
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 of
tax
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 is debatable which become a sensitive topic in
this
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 recent
day
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. I personally believe that lower
tax
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 is more advisable than higher
taxes
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due to
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economic
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the economic
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 level of
the
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apply
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society
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 and the
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government
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’s
wrongdoings
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. To commence with, there are
people
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 who can not afford to pay the
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government
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’s fee
due to
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 low economic
status
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. In
fact
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, there are
people
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 who
unemployed
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are unemployed
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 and can not even attain several basic needs,
such
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 as clothes and food.
Taxes
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 will be a burden for poor
people
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which
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who
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 exploit their
life
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. To illustrate
this
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, if the
commisions
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commissions
 had increased,
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population
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the population
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 would not afford to pay
,
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apply
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 and
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this impacts
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impacts
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impacted
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on
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apply
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the higher percentage of homeless and unemployment. Another point to consider is the
amount
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 of
fee
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fees
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 that have
poor
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a poor
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 correlation with the development
for
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of
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 the
country
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. Higher
taxes
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 do not mean
to be
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being
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 a better
country
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.
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 the higher
taxes
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 should
people
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 pay, the national authorities sometimes do their
wrongdoings
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,
such
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 as
corruptions
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corruption
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 and unwanted expenses.
This
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also
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create
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creates
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 disbelief
from
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in
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the
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apply
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society
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, which
impacts
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on
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apply
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low
adherence
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 to pay
commisions
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commissions
 and
betray
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betraying
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 their nation
by
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through
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 wars.
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, many
Indonesians
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Indonesian
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 Minister corrupt the money from their individual needs, which
make
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makes
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 Indonesians reduce their
adherence
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about
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to
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taxes
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.
To sum up
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, lower
taxes
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better
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are better
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 for
society
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due to
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economic
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the economic
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status
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on
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of
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 individuals and the wrong actions
from
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of
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 the
government
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. The
government
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 should consider the
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amount
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number
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 of
commisions
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commissions
 before
implement
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implementing
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it
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them
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 in the real
life
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. It is an indisputable
fact
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 that
taxes
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 have some merits and demerits for the
population
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. The
amount
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 of
tax
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 is debatable which become a sensitive topic in
this
Linking Words
 recent
day
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days
show examples
. I personally believe that lower
tax
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 is more advisable than higher
taxes
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due to
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 the economic level of
society
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 and the
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government
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’s
wrongdoings
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. To commence with, there are
people
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 who can not afford to pay the
Use synonyms
government
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’s fee
due to
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 low economic
status
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. In
fact
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, there are
people
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 who are unemployed and can not even attain several basic needs,
such
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 as clothes and food.
Taxes
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 will be a burden for poor
people
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 who exploit their
life
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. To illustrate
this
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, if the commissions had increased,
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population
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the population
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 would not afford to pay and
impacts
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the
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a
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 higher percentage of homeless and unemployment. Another point to consider is the number of fees that have a poor correlation with the development of the
country
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. Higher
taxes
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 do not mean being a better
country
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.
While
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 the higher
taxes
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 should
people
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 pay, the national authorities sometimes do
wrongdoings
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,
such
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 as corruption and unwanted expenses.
This
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also
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 creates disbelief
from
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in
show examples
the
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apply
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society
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, which
impacts
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on
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apply
show examples
low
adherence
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 to paying commissions and betraying their nation through wars.
For instance
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, many
Minister
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ministers
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 of Indonesia corrupt the money from their individual needs, which makes Indonesians reduce their
adherence
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 to
taxes
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.
To sum up
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, lower
taxes
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 are better for
society
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due to
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 the economic
status
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 of individuals and the wrong actions
from
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of
show examples
 the
government
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. The
government
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 should consider the
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amount
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number
show examples
 of commissions before implementing it in the real
life
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public services
  • infrastructure
  • disposable income
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • income inequality
  • redistributive policies
  • equitable
  • disparities
  • stifle
  • innovation
  • burdensome
  • dynamic
  • competitive
  • efficiency
  • administration
  • tax collection
  • wastage
  • disadvantages
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