The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs illustrate the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
hours
spent doing chores in households
in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, the percentage of household
with electrical appliances rose gradually, Fix the agreement mistake
households
while
there was a significant fall in the amount of time spent doing house hold
chores. In 2019, the Correct your spelling
household
number
of households
Correct pronoun usage
that used
used
vacuum Wrong verb form
using
cleaner
and Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
refrigerator
reached a peak at 100 Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
percent
, Change the spelling
per cent
where as
the amount of time to do Correct your spelling
whereas
house work
reached Correct your spelling
housework
the
lowest point, just 10 Change the word
its
hours
per week. from 1920 to 1960, the percentage of households
with washing machine
and vacuum Fix the agreement mistake
machines
cleaner
increased slightly, Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
accounted
for Wrong verb form
accounting
to
Correct your spelling
two
percent
. Meanwhile, Change the spelling
per cent
number
of Correct article usage
the number
hours
for doing chores. at the same time decreased moderately by 30 hours
per week. From the period of 59 years next,
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
households
used
Correct pronoun usage
that used
refrigerator
and vacuum Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
cleaner
rose slightly, about 30 Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
percent
, Change the spelling
per cent
while
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
hours
for housework was stable, around 15 hours
.
In some countries, there are more people who concern
Add a missing verb
are concern
in
finding information about the history of the house in which they live. There are various reasons for Change preposition
about
this
and people find different ways to research information.Submitted by cathyngo1512 on
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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