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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs illustrate the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
hours
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 spent doing chores in
households
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 in one country from 1920 to 2019.
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, the percentage of
household
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households
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 with electrical appliances rose gradually,
while
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 there was a significant fall in the amount of time spent doing
house hold
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household
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 chores. In 2019, the
number
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 of
households
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that used
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used
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using
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 vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 and
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 reached a peak at 100
percent
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per cent
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,
where as
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whereas
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 the amount of time to do
house work
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housework
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 reached
the
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its
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 lowest point, just 10
hours
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 per week. from 1920 to 1960, the percentage of
households
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 with washing
machine
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machines
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 and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 increased slightly,
accounted
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accounting
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 for
to
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two
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percent
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per cent
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. Meanwhile,
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number
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the number
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 of
hours
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 for doing chores. at the same time decreased moderately by 30
hours
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 per week. From the period of 59 years
next,
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
households
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used
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that used
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 rose slightly, about 30
percent
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per cent
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,
while
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
hours
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 for housework was stable, around 15
hours
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. In some countries, there are more people who
concern
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are concern
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in
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about
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 finding information about the history of the house in which they live. There are various reasons for
this
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 and people find different ways to research information.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, hours, households with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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