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Band 6

A neighbour has damaged your car while parking his/her vehicle in the lane in front of your house. Write a letter to your neighbor. In your letter: * explain why you are writing * describe the damage to your car and express your feelings about it * recommend what steps he/she should take to resolve the situation.

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 letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits.I am your close neighbour Laylo. I am writing to let you know that I feel sorry about the accident you caused yesterday.
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 to say, it depends on my car.
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, the purpose of writing
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 letter is to ask you to compensate the expenses being assessed. Today, I have taken it to the auto service in order to determine the cost of repair.
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 the expert, assessment the price will be 300 dollars. It really made me a little bit depressed because that car was gifted to me by my brother
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 the expenditure shocked me. I would be extremely grateful if you compensate the expenses being assessed. Another suggestion would be to take my vehicle to the service that you are relying on and familiar with. I hope you will address
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 issue as soon as possible. Yours Sincerely, Rustamova Laylo

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Coherence and Cohesion
The logical structure of the letter is unclear. Use clear paragraphing and sequencing to enhance coherence.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing lack appropriate formality. Use a more suitable greeting and closing for a formal letter.
Task Achievement
The letter partially addresses the task requirements. Ensure to fully address the task prompt and follow the appropriate tone for a formal letter.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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