the diagram below shows the manufacturing process of making sugar from sugar cane. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the diagram below shows the manufacturing process of making sugar from sugar cane.

summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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illustration highlights data about the steps of making
sugar
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.There are 7 stages in the process, starting with growing
sugar
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cane and ending up with drying and cooling it. The first stage is that
sugar
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cane
are
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grown at approximately 12 until 18 months.
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this
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, having been grown over the period, the
sugar
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cane
are
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cut down and harvested by people.
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, a special tractor is picked up and put
it
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into a box.
Subsequently
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, after being crushed by a special machine, the
sugar
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canes
are produced
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a
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as
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juice. In the next stage,
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juice is purified into a limestone filter, after which is heated by an evaporator to create syrup into juice.
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, when a
seperates
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separate
sugar
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has been
crystaised
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crystalised
from
a
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syrup by centrifuge,
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the
sugar
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is
under went
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underwent
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to a metal box and it is dried and cooled there.
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completes the process of making
sugar
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • mature
  • harvest
  • extract
  • purification
  • impurities
  • evaporation
  • thick syrup
  • crystallization
  • centrifugation
  • molasses
  • raw sugar crystals
  • refinement
  • purify
  • whiten
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