the diagram below shows the manufacturing process of making sugar from sugar cane. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
illustration highlights data about the steps of making sugar
.There are 7 stages in the process, starting with growing sugar
cane and ending up with drying and cooling it.
The first stage is that sugar
cane are
grown at approximately 12 until 18 months. Change the verb form
is
Following
this
, having been grown over the period, the sugar
cane are
cut down and harvested by people. Change the verb form
is
Then
, a special tractor is picked up and put it
into a box. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Subsequently
, after being crushed by a special machine, the sugar
canes are produced
Change the verb form
have produced
a
juice.
In the next stage, Correct your spelling
as
this
juice is purified into a limestone filter, after which is heated by an evaporator to create syrup into juice. Finally
, when a seperates
Correct your spelling
separate
sugar
has been crystaised
from Correct your spelling
crystalised
a
syrup by centrifuge, Remove the article
apply
then
the sugar
is under went
to a metal box and it is dried and cooled there. Correct your spelling
underwent
This
completes the process of making sugar
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