The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
The provided chart displays different types of Australian poor families in 1999.
Overall
, what stands out from the chart is the fact that the poorest kind of household is represented by the sole parents. On the contrary
, the less poor are the aged couple.
Let's take a look at the data in detail. As regards the
singles, there are three kinds of individuals without partners. The single aged person is the wealthier category among them, in Correct article usage
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fact
it represents only 6% of the households living in poverty. Add a comma
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Then
, singles without kids are
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similarly
to the single parents that have the highest percentage Change the word
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showed
by the table.
Let's have a look at the couples. The aged couples are the richest, reaching 4%. The partners that decided not to have babies Wrong verb form
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are
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while
the number of poor parents that aren't divorced is higher, namely 12%. In general, all households that
live in miserable conditions in Australia are 11%.Correct pronoun usage
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