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Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitoring are unaware that this is happening. Do you think that advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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I acknowledge the fact that
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improved to the stage it is following most of the population and its behaviour,
thus
 monitoring and influencing their activity.
Nevertheless
, the person being followed does not suspect it, which may cause a wave of unapprovement and frustration.
This
 essay will present the general advantages and disadvantages of the stated topic. Starting with the adverse effect, I believe that tracking systems have been seized as a nefast influence on individuals' lives, causing not only insecurity about their general activity but emphasizing the fear
as a consequence
. As a support for the massive frustration may be considered numerous cases in which it was identified the way minors and victims of stalkers were followed by the same threat. It leads to understanding that the force of technology is being underrated and underestimated. Contrary to
this
, it seems to me that being the target of monitoring has a beneficial side as well. The reason for
this
 is constantly appearing in the safe zone and being protected by the government or police stations.
Although
 numerous people would not agree, I think
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promising potential for the security
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 the danger of kidnapping, being detected by the nearby cameras will allow guarding people to find the exact location of the victim, which leads to eliminating the threat in a more rapid way. Summarizing the given information, I strongly approve that
although
 the monitoring process has its drawbacks, the beneficial side seems to outweigh it by being
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constant way under guard.
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