THE USE OF SMARTPHONES IS DECREASING OUR COLLECTIVE INTELLIGENCE BECAUSE WE ARE RELIANT ON THE TECHNOLOGY NOT ON OUR OWN MINDS. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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The use of the

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well-established

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fact, we are completely addicted to them. Any technological innovation has always brought with it both positive and negative aspects, advantages and disadvantages. The

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history

is full of similar cases, it is

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sufficient

to think about what the electronic calculators meant for the 20th century. The rapidity in counting has been pitted against the loss of the usual ability in

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generation.

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most of us

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lost the familiarity with elementary mathematical rules.

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school teachers

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exercises’

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dictation leading students to a progressive worsening of hand-writing skills. Even the introduction of smartphones has two sides of the same coin. From my point of view ,the most advantage of the smartphone is the “portability”. It is always with us

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We have gained the possibility to call someone immediately without spending time

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searching a phone booth.

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is useful for sure in case of emergency situations like

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issues or

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down car. The possibility to use apps to arrange

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, make online shopping,

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personal

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and payments is a saving-time advantage and

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environment

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protection thanks to a paper-less approach. There is a negative side as well, of course. First of all, I can say the lack of privacy and the almost pathological addiction between users and

tool

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. We rely on smartphones so much that we are no longer used to

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our appointments or the grocery list by ourselves. When we cannot use our cellphone because of low battery or bad signal we feel vulnerable and almost “naked” In conclusion , I

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that smartphones have been decreasing our memorization abilities but

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benefits

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negative

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side. In a world where technology goes

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a high speed way think to step back in

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pre-smartphone age would be like to come back in a world without electricity

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THE USE OF SMARTPHONES IS DECREASING OUR COLLECTIVE INTELLIGENCE BECAUSE WE ARE RELIANT ON THE TECHNOLOGY NOT ON OUR OWN MINDS. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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An international company is offering a temporary job for work experience, write a letter to apply for that job. You need to explain where did you find this information why you want to apply this job what qualification you have what position you want to apply

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