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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

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These days a lot of students prefer other subjects more than
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subjects in many schools all over the world. So, some people think that it doesn’t matter that much to learn
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 others believe that it is hard to learn.
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 our society. on one hand, some communities don’t respect science.
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, a few men and women prefer to study art or fiscal work classes rather than learn education they think everything has to be fun,
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 science could be fun, but you have to love it. So that’s why some think that it is just a waste of time.
On the other hand
, it's hard to be learned and memorized. To illustrate in mathematics books we have a lot of information to get and it takes time to understand.
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, in
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 you can't just read you have to be focused and your mind is so clear to get well above information.
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, there are other things to do rather than learning science. for an instance, you could get a cooking class it's not that hard and you are learning something new.
This
 proves clearly that it's an exhausting task and there is always another way. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of multiple reasons, I believe that it's
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 our society in a negative way if we keep avoiding sciences it will end up being an uneducated community and useless people.
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