Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

The increasing popularity of so-called extreme
sports
such
as
base
jumping and
rock
climbing
have
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led to backlash calling for them to be banned.
Although
these
sports
are potentially fatal, they should not be banned as they are
also
fun
and can be undertaken responsibly. The reason that many have demanded limits on extreme
sports
is their potential for injury and death. Take
for example
one of the most notorious extreme
sports
:
base
jumping. In
this
sport
, participants jump off a given point (a cliff or building,
for example
) with a parachute. There is very little time before they hit the ground so unforeseen parachute malfunctions are possible and the fatality rate is extremely high. Those that do not die may suffer severe, debilitating injuries
such
as paralysis and brain damage.
Base
jumping is something of an outlier on the spectrum of dangerous
sports
but all these
sports
involve varying degrees of danger. Despite the aforementioned concerns, I believe the
fun
people have
outweighs
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potential injury when they are cautious.
Base
jumping is the most perilous extreme
sport
but other
sports
such
as skiing, deep-sea diving, and
rock
climbing are relatively safe.
Rock
climbing is a good example of a
sport
that can be very safe and
fun
if proper precautions are taken. You should sign up for training and go with someone who knows how to safely rig up the harness and tie the requisite knots. Many people who try it end up
become
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passionate
rock
climbers because it is an
exhilirating
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exhilarating
experience. Most extreme
sports
, taken seriously, present little real danger and are an enjoyable
pasttime
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pastime
past time
. In conclusion, extreme
sports
are
fun
and do not have to be particularly dangerous. People should take the opportunity to responsibly try out at least one extreme
sport
in their lives in order to see if it is to their liking.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adrenaline rush
  • risk threshold
  • thrill-seeking
  • safety protocols
  • hazard assessment
  • adventure tourism
  • regulatory framework
  • personal autonomy
  • informed consent
  • risk mitigation strategies
  • thrill-seeking behavior
  • protective gear
  • extreme athleticism
  • freedom of choice
  • accident prevalence
  • emergency response
  • courage and resilience
  • endorphin release
  • legal implications
  • peer pressure effects
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