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What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers, and what are some of the possible solutions?

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No doubt that technology brings a lot of electronic devices among the public and the computer is one of the popular gadgets
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 used by office goers and students. But nowadays, some
pupils
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 are totally reliant on
computers
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. I will elaborate on my viewpoints with suitable examples and a conclusion. First and foremost, laptops bring more advantages to students and other masses. Some learners devote a lot of time to
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 for their educational purposes and other tasks because of
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, they do not use their own brain and their ideas
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, they are eliminating their logical and thinking skills
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, they could not grasp general knowledge.
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, if
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 will use
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 all the time
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 they can face an obesity problem because they will not do any other body movements and will just sit in front of
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.
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, many scholars can reduce their eyesight by the overuse of macs.
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, every problem has a solution,there could be some possible tackles to overcome the usage of notepads.
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, teachers and parents should encourage the
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 to read books dint of
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, they will not focus on the
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 and they can read the books in the garden, cafe and library
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, scholars can do a little form of exercise
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, they can meet other persons.
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, instructors should make a schedule for the
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 to use
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 and the rest of the time, they can play outside games which will help them to stay fit and active. To recapitulate, notepads provide many fruitful benefits to students but there should be some limitations to utilising
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 and it must be the responsibility of parents and teachers to motivate scholars to play outside.
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