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In many countries, governments spend large sums of money on the arts and this is supported by some taxpayers as worthwhile. Others, however, think that this money would be better spent on health and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#countries #governments #sums #money #arts #taxpayers #health #education
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Whether the
government
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funds for the recreation field, or focus on
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health
wellbeing
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and
education
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 the public. I completely agree with
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specific reasons. There are
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 of reasons that can explain well
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 the authorities need to consider spending
money
 on
education
 and
health
. The primary factor that could be taken into account is that arts
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indispensable
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 role in
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developing
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 positive environment.
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 is because artists are using
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recycle
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 materials to create
a
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useful art. To illustrate, In India, empty walls on the roads are painted with colours and gives amazing feature when walking.
In addition
 to
this
, it supports
thé
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the
 efforts of you g children who are performing
good
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 in
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the arts
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arts
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 field and lack knowledge in other
ares
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areas
 of study.
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 I
also
 believe
thát
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that
health
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the health
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 and
education
 sectors should have equal access to the
money
 provided by the
government
.
This
 is
due to
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that
education
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 as ả significant tool that can ensure
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a bright
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 future
of
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 any nation. People who are below
poverty
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the poverty
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 are not able to study
due to
 financial instability,
hence
 free educational services must be introduced to these minor families.
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 eminent example of free
education
 can be seen in
UK
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the UK
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 where the
government
 is taking the whole responsibility
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 their
educational
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 until the age of 18 in case of
financial
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the financial
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 crisis.
Apart from
this
,
health
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the health
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 sector must introduce
the
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free
health
 services to promote thè
health
 and wellness, since all
of
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the
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individuals are paying huge
amount
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amounts
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 of taxes
while
 they were working.
Therefore
, it is necessary that
government
 needs to help them
in
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 later age when they are unable to pay for their
health
 conditions. In conclusion, I accept that
government
 needs to give some
money
 to
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the arts
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arts
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 field,
while
 I believe that
Health
 and educational departments require
same
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the same
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 amount of
money
, and should never be neglected.
Submitted by Navneet Dhand on

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