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Food can be produced much more cheaply today because of improved fertilizer and better machinery. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your opinion.

#food #fertilizer #machinery
nowadays,
due to
 the increased quality of infrastructure, the
products
 of foods are cheaper than in the past because the farmers used better fertilizers and tools.
this
 happens to have several merits and some drawbacks. in
this
 essay, I will want to discuss both sides of them. on the one hand, there are those who subscribe that there are several merits when
people
 are able to buy cheaper
products
. they insist that, if food
products
 have low prices, the number of
people
 willing to buy them increases rapidly.
hence
, the statistics of hunger and poverty decline significantly in the long run. so, there are highly beneficial for Low-income
people
. from a social perspective, it is a decisive factor in a rise high standard of living.
additionally
, from an economical standpoint, if the price of production of foods downwards, there will be several businessmen willing to export these types of
products
.
consequently
,
this
 is able to be a reliable source of income for each administration.
on the other hand
, many commentators justifiably argue that there are some disadvantages to producing much more cheaply. from
this
 point of view, the quality of these type of foods are less than past so, it can be a threat to the health of
people
 in the long period. they believe farmers don't attention to the quality of them and they just want to produce cheaper food.
however
, I don't find
this
 argument valid because governments should Supervision and care in process of
products
. in conclusion,
although
 there are some disadvantages , the positive points of them are noticeable.
Submitted by amirhsina on

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