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Some people believe that unpaid commuting service should be compulsory part of high school programmes. Do you agree or diagree?

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It is opined several people's uncharged public transportation should be a mandatory part of high school courses. I partially agree with
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 statement.
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 with, reducing the
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 of commuting for a low-class family is not only improving the quality of life but
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 amplifying their opportunity.
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, a historical documentary about China dynasty had once been filmed by tracing evidence throughout the country and win the national film festival.
This
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 is possible because of the policy supporting young travelling. What’s more, without considering the journey expenses, the students are encouraged to explore the world to broaden their perspective. The more experience they have, unsurprisingly, the more contribution they have achieved.
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, the Wright brothers, the ones who invented the first aircraft, get inspiration by observing the trajectory of various birds beyond regions.
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, zero charge transport costs, definitely, invite crimes committed by an adolescent.
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 the cunning approach of the villain, the children have been tricked to be notorious.
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, young citizen of Europe participates in ISIS to become terrorist. If the
cost
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 of travelling is hugely cut, the wrong one will have more options to stir illegal activities.
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, the
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 of commuting for children will be funded by collecting more taxes resulting in unhappiness and rising expenses for certain individuals
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 as skilled workers and the middle class . In conclusion,
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 the free
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 of commuting leads to several benefits, there are various disadvantages that tremendously damage society
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 as the increase in crime
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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