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Nowdays , People have adopted an unhealthy lifestyle. Why do think this is ? How could this problem be solved ?

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In modern times, when we have
accesebility
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accessibility
of
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huge
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 number of
fastfood
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fast food
 companies, it is easy to eat unhealthy.
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majority
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the majority
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 of us don'
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 move properly and Today, in
healthy
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 lifestyle era, is everyone talking about how we should live, how often we should move, or what we should eat, it is everywhere, on
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social media,
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 the TV, etc...
Unfortunatelly
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Unfortunately
 these types of
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advertisements
doesn'
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t
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 work well for these, who live
unhealthy
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unhealthily
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. They often eat in
fastfoods
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fast foods
, don'
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 exercise or do sport and I believe the reason
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 their way of living is
lack
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a lack
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 of education about
healthy
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 lifestyle. Prevention is the key how to restrict the problems, majority of
population
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the population
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 doesn'
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 eat vegetables or fruit daily, their excuses are
the
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that
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 vegetable is expensive or they don'
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 like
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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