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Some people trust their first impressions about a person's character because they believe their judgements are generally correct. Other people don't judge a person's character quickly because they believe first impressions are wrong. Get ready to to talk to an examiner about this issue.

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It is commonly believed that
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 the
first
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first
 glance. But others advocate that if you want to clarify
person's
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 character quickly, considering prior
impression
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 is mainly redundant. I intend to delve into the
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pros and cons of both
approachs
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approaches
.
To begin
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person
 has
unique
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 character and desires. So, the majority of
people
 behave through
some
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body
languages
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 and facial
expressions
 in different situations. But the
first
 meetings
are differ
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 from the other appointments. Because
people
 usually pay their attitudes as much as possible more attention. If the
person
 cares about other
people
's opinions,
ones
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 endeavour to attract their
attentions
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.
In addition
, they try to avoid speaking unconsciously.
For example
, in some
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high
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 schools, teachers try to arrange football
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 for
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a newcomer
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newcomer
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. In fact, it is
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 valuable arrangement for everybody, because
during
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 the match,
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 emotional occasion frequently can change.
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 their peers can get a chance to know their personality
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better and closer. On the other side, in some situations, via tricky questions and body signals
people
 can
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about
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other's
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others'
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 inner world. Mostly interviewers,
also
 the prosecutors can acquire particular
informations
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 from
person's
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a person's
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 size of
pupil
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 and facial
expressions
 in the
first
 meeting. there
are
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the
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 number of techniques to understand
to
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your correspondent,
however
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 you have got professions related to reading
people
's facial
expressions
 and behaviour,
nobody
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 would be able to
decieve
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deceive
 you. To put it in a nutshell, I pencil down saying that if you have some
experiences
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experience
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 to understand
the
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others' moral world and facial
expressions
, you can do it in the
first
 meeting.
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