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the bar chart exposes the export number of diffenrent sectors in southland in three separated years.

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A glance at the bar graph provided reveals the total amount of primary exports in terms of three sectors in the southland in 2000, and 2020
as well as
 a projection for 2015.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 international tourism accounted for the largest exporting part among these three sectors. And it showed an upward trend, compared to meat products which saw a gradual decline from 2000 to 2050. In 2000, the number of international tourists was the highest, with above 7.5
billion
,
whereas
 the least that meat products were around 5.5
billion
.
Then
, the figure for dairy products experienced a significant increase in 2020, from 7 to 10
billion
, almost rising by 3
billion
. By 2050, oversea tourism gains a positive expectation, peaking at the number of 10
billion
.
Also
, the data on dairy production see a number of approximately 9
billion
.
However
, the meat export is estimated to fall, under 5
billion
.
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