Some people say the government should give healthcare the first priority, some others believe there are more important priorities to spend the tax payers' money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people say the government should give healthcare the first priority, some others believe there are more important priorities to spend the tax payers' money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Your opinion

Children who are brought up in a family that does not have a lot of money are better prepared to deal with problems when they become adults than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. Do agree or disagree with the statement.

Too much emphasis is given for education of the young. More government money should be spent to free time activity of young people. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.