Some people say the government should give healthcare the first priority, some others believe there are more important priorities to spend the tax payers' money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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should

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another

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crucial

periorities

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priorities

we need to spend the

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older

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in their lives.Not only elder

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about their neonates ,which born before they complete the 9

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uterus, those

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without

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their life will end .

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medical help because the older they became the more disease they have.

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healthcare

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majorty

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usually the youth, see that it is important to spend mo

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priorities

such

education

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beginning

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tourism

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main part of

healthcare

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health care or

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the long run ,

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dividing

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Some people say the government should give healthcare the first priority, some others believe there are more important priorities to spend the tax payers' money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Your opinion

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