You have seen an advertisement in Australian magazines for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child write a letter # Explain why you would like this # Give detail of why you are a suitable person to employ # Say how would you spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir, I am writing to you with regards to an advertisement for looking after your six-year child. First and foremost, I am Anne, living in Park Avenue, Sydney near your home. I did a course in childcare

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year. The main reason behind my interest is that I am looking for a job because my previous family moved to another state and

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that I have to leave that

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. Moving on, I find myself suitable for

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because I

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did training in

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field

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experience. I know how to behave with children and about their diet. I gained

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knowledge through a 3-year course.

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, I

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have references from my previous family where I was working

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, whenever I get free time during the weekends at that time I went to the childcare centre situated in the centre of the city and spent time with the children. Well, I found

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very interesting, if you find me suitable for

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and required any

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information please contact me. My email id is [email protected]. I am looking forward to hearing from you . Yours sincerely, Sauna

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

197 words

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