“Public libraries should only provide books and should not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media such as software, videos or DVDs. Do you agree or disagree?”

Nowadays,
libraries
contain improved technology media .
such
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useful
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lot of people
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it is
such
a waste of money. In my opinion, using modern techniques to attract the younger generation is a huge
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investment
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wasted money. In the past,
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libraries
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it was all about books, which is only paper books, which is an acceptable thing until
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technology
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our life. And
that is
why we should spend more money and resources on developing it ,so it will co-op the new world. In
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order
to attract a new generation to go to the
libraries
, using new tech to
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influence
people to do so.
For example
, nowadays there is
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something
known as
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an audio
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audio book
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audiobook
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, which is a recorded script of
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book, using
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puplic
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public
library will
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assist
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always distracted by the media that
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their phones all the time, to spend more time in a place like that.
to conclude
, spending more finance and
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resources
on developing new modern technology in a
puplic
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public
place ,namely
libraries
is in my
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opinion
, a must in
this
time we live in because we can not ignore the world around us ,which moves forward
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speedily
steadily
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