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you recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. you think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter - say why he/she would not enjoy going to college - explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her - suggest rypes of job that would be suitable for him/her

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Dear Hana, I'm so glad to read your letter and I appreciate that you opted me for giving some pieces of advice about your decision. As far as I know, you don't believe in an education degree and haven't sufficient time to study,
hence
 going to college isn't fantastic for you. As though, you need more money for covering your expenses in life, so choosing a job is excellent for you. Personally, I think that you have a good talent for business. you are so active, sociable and motivated for earning money.
Then
, I see that you follow economical subjects and analyse the changes.
As a result
,
due to
 all of these factors, choosing a suitable job is more logical than going to college for you.
Lastly
, I recommend you choose a sales career. You are able to communicate with people and have good confidence.
Furthermore
, as I said, you are keen on earning money and finding the best opportunities to progress in finance.
Thus
, opting sales field as a career and ignoring college will be beneficial for you. I waiting for your reply soon. Best Regards, Hossein
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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • vocational
  • apprenticeship
  • hands-on learning
  • practical skills
  • specific career
  • student loan debt
  • immediate practical experience
  • gain work experience
  • enter the workforce
  • job prospects
  • financial stability
  • career advancement
  • entrepreneurship
  • freelancing
  • part-time job
  • self-employment
  • trade school
  • technical college
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