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The diagrams show the structure of solar panel and its use. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams show the structure of solar panel and its use. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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A structure of a solar
panel
 and how to use it
were
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 illustrated.
Overall
, objects needed to
created
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create
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 a
sunlight powered
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sunlight-powered
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panel
 are given,
along with
 two ways showing how the
panel
 is used.
This
 solar
panel
 is constructed using three elements, a box, a
transparant
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transparent
 top ,and two tubes, which
is
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 attached on the top left corner pointed outward and on the bottom right corner pointed
to
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in
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 the same direction as above. These three parts are assembled
to gether
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together
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 to form a
panel
 powered by
a
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apply
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sunlight. There are two ways to use the solar
panel
, to generate warm air and warm
water
. By trapping cool air that runs inside from the upper left corner, the sunlight will increase its temperature and
thus
 release it out through an outlet.
This
 similar
idea
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also
 useful in generating warm
water
. In
additional
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 to
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the sun
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sun ray
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sunray
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 direct heat energy, a
water
 pipe needed to be installed in order to let the
water
 flow. Cool
water
 will
be inject
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 through the inlet tube and run through the
water
 pipe, in
this
 process heat energy from the sun will slowly heat up the
water
,
resulted
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resulting
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 in warm
water
, which
flow
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flows
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 out through the outlet.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words panel, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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