Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays,
people
are deciding to make new friends with new
people
.In my own ,opinion it is unnecessary, and in
this
, essay I am going to provide some examples to support my view. First and foremost, one of the main causes why I am thinking that, is that
although
, with a new friend you can do more things than old,
however
, the old intimate will be upset, since, he or she will feel vexation in his or her mind. Americans,
for instance
, if they fail an exam,
for example
, and their playfellow has helped
him
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them in the majority of cases, they always leave them and make new friends with other students, whose knowledge is better than theirs.
This
problem could be solved by attracting the attention of their parents, and what their children do.
Secondly
, many
people
abandon their ally
by
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if they have unconsciously strung them, in spite of their bud unconsciously stringing them, they don't care. Let's take Uzbekistan,
for example
, many
people
expect that moment when their friend will latently hurt them, scarcely they often go away from them.To tackle
this
problem, the government should train students through corporal punishment.
To sum up
, it can be seen that, there are two main causes, which support my view
such
as waiting moment to leave their mate and make
a friendship
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with wise students. In my personal ,experience unless we bring up our children's education, we will face a greater problem, which the government cannot solve.
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