The maps bellow show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now , and plans for its development.

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maps

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illustrates the centre of a small area

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name Islip as it is now

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and projects for its future condition.

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, it can be seen that nowadays the town centre

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six

areas

then

the

city

plan is

expande

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expanding

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reach eleven. The pictures

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present

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time it is a small but next time

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and complex. On the one hand,

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plan will enlarge

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, now the

city

involve

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six

areas

but

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stage will be eleven

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station, shopping centre, car

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, housing and pedestrian area. The countryside will divide

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and create

new

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building

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the main

road

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demolished

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pedestrian

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area. The main

road

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city

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. The school and the

park

location are south of the town

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the

park

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shops,

main

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school

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. In the meantime the

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unuseful

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for walking people.

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the countryside

have

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large

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hectar

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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, city, park, road with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
32Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

185 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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