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The maps bellow show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now , and plans for its development.

The maps bellow show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now , and plans for its development.
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The
maps
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 illustrates the centre of a small area
that is
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 name Islip as it is now
,
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 and projects for its future condition.
Overall
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, it can be seen that nowadays the town centre
have
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has
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six
areas
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then
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 the
city
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 plan is
expande
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expanding
 for the reason
figures
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the figures
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 reach eleven. The pictures
are demonstrate
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present
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the present
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 time it is a small but next time
is enlarge
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is enlarged
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 and complex. On the one hand,
future
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 plan will enlarge
areas
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, now the
city
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involve
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 six
areas
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 but
next
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the next
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 stage will be eleven
areas
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 namely
bus
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the bus
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 station, shopping centre, car
park
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, housing and pedestrian area. The countryside will divide
four
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into four
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 and create
new
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a new
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building
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buildings
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.
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Moreover
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 the main
road
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 has
demolished
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been demolished
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 and
make
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made
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pedestrian
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a pedestrian
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 area. The main
road
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 will extend so change location to around of
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city
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the city
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. The school and the
park
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 location are south of the town
also
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, creating new housing near
to
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apply
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the
park
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.
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,
present
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at present
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 time the
city
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have
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has
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 shops,
main
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a main
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road
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 ,
school
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a school
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 ,and
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park
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a park
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. In the meantime the
road
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unuseful
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is unuseful
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 for walking people.
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However
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 the countryside
have
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has
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large
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a large
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hectar
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hectare
 so that condition must be
using
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used
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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, city, park, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • residential
  • commercial
  • pedestrianization
  • relocation
  • sustainability
  • urban planning
  • land use
  • green spaces
  • civic amenities
  • public transport options
  • commute
  • zoning
  • traffic congestion
  • redevelopment
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