The maps bellow show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now , and plans for its development.

The maps bellow show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now , and plans for its development.
The
maps
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illustrates the centre of a small area
that is
name Islip as it is now
,
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and projects for its future condition.
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, it can be seen that nowadays the town centre
have
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six
areas
then
the
city
plan is
expande
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expanding
for the reason
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reach eleven. The pictures
are demonstrate
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present
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time it is a small but next time
is enlarge
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and complex. On the one hand,
future
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plan will enlarge
areas
, now the
city
involve
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six
areas
but
next
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stage will be eleven
areas
namely
bus
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station, shopping centre, car
park
, housing and pedestrian area. The countryside will divide
four
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and create
new
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building
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.
Moreover
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the main
road
has
demolished
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and
make
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pedestrian
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a pedestrian
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area. The main
road
will extend so change location to around of
city
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. The school and the
park
location are south of the town
also
, creating new housing near
to
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the
park
.
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,
present
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time the
city
have
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shops,
main
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a main
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road
,
school
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a school
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,and
park
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a park
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. In the meantime the
road
unuseful
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for walking people.
However
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the countryside
have
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large
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a large
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hectar
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hectare
so that condition must be
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, city, park, road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.

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