Some people think paying taxes is a big enough contribution to their society, while others think people have more responsibilities as members of society than only paying taxes. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, meeting one's tax obligation becoming
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topic. Some people think, paying bills
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ample contribution to their society,
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others opinion, there are more obligations
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a
citizenship
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society rather than paying taxes. In
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essay, I will discuss both views
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and provide my personal perspective.
To begin
with, it
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that, many people
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consider, paying the bills
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enough for society, and their foundation.
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is because, the government can create some healthcare organizations, and support the services by
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account.
Furthermore
, I think
this
is not a
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approach to
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statement. Because of that, there are a lot of issues of the government that we cannot imagine.
On the other hand
, in front of a significant number of the government's problems, I think our paying taxes
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far too little thing.
However
, I fundamentally agree, that there are numerous responsibilities that we should contribute to the quality of the buildings, and view of our cities.
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, air pollution and environmental pollution becoming
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global
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in
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these days.
That is
why, we should approach humility and clarity to
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problem.
Nevertheless
, once a month, if we organize
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activities, afterwards
this
can be disposed to build up the view of the city. Simultaneously, these actions can originate the flow of tourists. In summary, everyone
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for
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of the suburbs and
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, and as I mentioned before, there are numerous ways to handle
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these problems if every individual understands the meaning of life
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