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Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate. Which do you agree with?

#people #schools #purpose
In today's modern era, where almost everything is under development there is
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 if the
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 some improvement. Some believe that
schools
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 that school is here for teaching and gaining
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wisdom
. Regarding those who are of the opinion that
schools
 are here to educate, the number one reason is that pupils won't have proper knowledge of subjects
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languages
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 future career,
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 they wouldn't
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 which leads to
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salary
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 another group suppose that students should be
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 and fun place where children should be happy to spend
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 time. Scientist
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 researched that
this
 type of
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positive
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impact
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desease
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disease
 called ''ADHD''. It is not as boring as normal
schools
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 can play all
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day, these
schools
 named Montessori are getting extremely popular
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. The main reason
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 parents register their babies to these
education
 systems is
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 they believe that in an era of technology
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 we can search
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 online and we don't have to memorise everything.
In
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 Jan Amos Komenský
also
 known as the teacher of nations, who lived in
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 century said that
education
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fun
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 way.
To conclude
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 system should undergo some sort of development and we should not remain on archaic techniques
nevertheless
 should have some sort of wisdom when they are leaving the
education
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institutions
.
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