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A balanced diet, or eating balanced meals, is the key to a healthy life. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#diet #meals #life
The health
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Health
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 is
crown
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 above healthier heads. And everyone must be taken care of his
diet
.
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 as
,
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 the perfect mind in a healthy body. They must follow the correct
diet
 and do exercise daily. On the one hand, to reach a balanced
diet
 there are many methods.
For example
, eating healthy food like vegetables and fruit,
stay
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 away from oil,
drink
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 much
of
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water, don't eat industrial sugar which you find in juice or chocolate.Take more
that
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than
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 three males during
day
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.For
range
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a range
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 of burn fat.
On the other hand
, exercise systems should arrange
in
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everyday
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.The best time
for
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do
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 it is in the morning before eating anything around 45 minutes.
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,I don't sit
a
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long time but walk after 20 minutes. In the end, when you
eating
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eat
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 and
exercising
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exercise
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 regularly your body becomes healthy, and doesn't must do
diet
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the diet
a diet
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Balanced diet
  • Essential nutrients
  • Vitamins and minerals
  • Proteins and fats
  • Chronic diseases
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Obesity
  • Mental health
  • Cognitive function
  • Omega-3 fatty acids
  • Healthy weight
  • Calorie intake
  • Overeating
  • Energy levels
  • Physical performance
  • Stronger immune system
  • Illnesses and infections
  • Variety of foods
  • Long-term health
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