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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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These charts depict information on the average daily Highest and lowest temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average figure of
days
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 with rainfall for two cities in Australia each month. It's clear from the graphs that the minimum degree reached in
Canberra
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while
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 the most
days
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 with rain in
Brisbane
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 .
According to
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 what is shown, the lowest temperature in
Canberra
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 was recorded at lower than 1C in July.
While
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 the lowest temperature in
Brisbane
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 represents at 10 degrees in August. There is a huge difference between temperatures in
Brisbane
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 and
Canberra
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. The maximum degree in
Brisbane
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 was recorded at 30C
Also
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 we can see the highest degree in
Canberra
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 shows at about 26 degrees.
Moreover
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, in the bar
chart
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 we can see the city that has the highest average of rain is
Brisbane
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 which
is
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reached 14
days
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. There's not that vast gap between these cities in the average number of
days
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 with precipitation. So we can see in
Canberra
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 almost reach 10
days
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.
To sum up
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, we can say the average daily temperatures have a significant distinction between these cities And the average number of
days
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 with rain does not match various.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words days, canberra, brisbane with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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