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The chart belo gives information about the ratio of income to spending (in dollars) by American by age range in 2013. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart belo gives information about the ratio of income to spending (in dollars) by American by age range in 2013. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagram indicates data on
quantitative
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the quantitative
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 relation of profit to expenditures by Americans among
range
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a range
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 of groups in 2013. Citizens of the United States
at
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in
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 middle
age
 account for
primary
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a primary
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 share of the income and expenses. With regard to the report, the lowest earnings represent youth under 25 years with about 30 000 dollars,
however
, their expenditure
marginally
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 higher than wages. The figures
shows
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 that American
people
 at
age
 35 – 44 are able to gain a decent revenue with about 80 000 dollars in a year.
Furthermore
, inhabitants of the USA aged 45 to 54 had the same profit as
people
with
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afore mentioned
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aforementioned
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age
. In accordance with
data
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the data
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of
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given
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 chart,
people
 in their 50s made up the majority amount of spending of 60 000 dollars.
In contrast
,
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the expenditure
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expenditure
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expenditures
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 of Americans between the ages of 35 and 44
are
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is
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 negligible lower. Older adults tend to make more profit
that
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than
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 youth aged 25 to 34 that chart illustrates the figures
of
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for
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 earnings of
the
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apply
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people
 over 55 years of
age
 much higher than young
people
 at 34 years old.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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