The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).
The table provides information on how many
people
visited abroad in 4 different
years
between 1990 to 2005. Data is given for 1990, 1995, 2000, and 2005 and focused areas are, Africa, America, Asia and
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pacific
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Pacific
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, Europe and
Middle
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the Middle
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east.
Total
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The total
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count of
people
increased from 448.9 million in 1990 to 615.2 million in 1995 showing
a
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rapid growth in a 5-year period of time
while
after that, it shows a slow upward trend.
Furthermore
, during the 25
years
of time overseas travels increased gradually in all the regions except in America where the number of
people
who went overseas had declined in 2005 compared to 2000.
Moreover
, in all four
years
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Europeans were responsible for more than half of the total count
while
the Middle East was the least contributor in all these
years
. The number
people
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of people
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from Asia and
Pacific
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the Pacific
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region who went
abroard
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abroad
had more than doubled in 2005 which was 135.8 million
than
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more than
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25
years
earlier.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant increase
  • international travel
  • popular destinations
  • economic growth
  • technological advancements
  • ease of travel
  • cultural exchange
  • globalization
  • fluctuations
  • trend
  • millions of travelers
  • annual growth rate
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