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In their advertising ,busines now-a-days usually emphasis that their products are new in some way Why is this? Do you think it is a poitive or negative development?

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Nowadays
companies
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 are trying to show their
products
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 as fresh ones or new in
advertisements
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. What is the reason behind
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? What do you consider is
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 a positive or negative development? Having more customers or purchasing their
products
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 are the main reasons and I strongly believe that
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 will not have a positive impact
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 selling their
products
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. To commence with, most businesses do
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 to have more customers and purchase their product as soon as possible with a good profit.
Furthermore
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, these
companies
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 are in competition with each other and because of that they are emphasising showing their
products
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 in the best way for their customer in
advertisements
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.
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, when you buy something online on the website you can see the photos of some
products
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 which look new and a good condition but when you order it they will send you the same item but not in good quality and condition and
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 why they do not concern what actually their customer want they just sale their
products
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 in some way. In my opinion,
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 is not a positive move from these
companies
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 because people will never trust them again in
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 or
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 will be difficult for them to select which
products
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 are new and which are not.
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, because of those misleading
companies
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 people will lose interest in watching
advertisements
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 on TV or on their smartphones.
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, governments should take action again
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 type of advertising and make some rules and regulations for them to avoid fake advertising in the future. In conclusion, people should think twice when they are watching
advertisements
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 about something and I think
companies
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 will stop doing something like
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 and
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 of ,
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 they will show their
products
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 as how it actually looks to their customers.
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