More and more people today are using computers and electronic devices to access information. Therefore there is no need to print books, magazines and newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
nation
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every day
use
electronic devices for founding new information about various fields. We
use
the internet for almost every little and
a
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big question. But we do not
use
newspapers,
books
and magazines. As it was often used in the past. In my opinion, using electronic devices,
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is more comfortable. Because paper takes
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lot of space.
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useful for ecology in our World.
Additionally
, people can research ancient documents which were written about 1000 years ago without big encyclopedias.
In addition
, you can quickly
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anything and anyone.
For instance
, you are lost in
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town and you need to find a store, but you do not where it may reside. You can rapidly
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a map
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map
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on your device,
instead
of carrying it in a bag. Either, you should write homework about monuments in your city and when they were built. You can write in information service and fast found all.
Also
, people with print
magazine
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magazines
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engage for a more extended time frame than their digital magazines.
On the other hand
, when you
use
smartphone
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it ruins your eyes.
In addition
, when you read print you can hold it, turn the pages, and feel the paper. Print
books
work anywhere anytime, no batteries, chargers, or internet connections are needed to learn.
Finally
, I can say that
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  all
society
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of society
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depend
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from
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electronic gadgets. But some people still
use
printed
books
. And I agree that electronic types of documents and
books
are more appropriate because you can put
all
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them all
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in
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on
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your phone
also
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and also
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read
it
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them
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someday and somewhere.
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