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in spite of the advances made in agriculture , many people around the world still go hungery. why is this case? what can be done about this proplem?

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The number of people ,who are starving,around the
world
 ,are in continuous increase every day.
This
 essay will discuss some of the reasons that might be causing
this
 obstacle ,
as well as
 the solutions to
this
 case. In the
last
 50
years
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 technology has
envaded
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invaded
evaded
 the agricultural
world
 ,
as a
result
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 a lot of resources are spent on how to
develope
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develop
 it.
for example
, a new way of watering
the
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plants is been done in a number of farms in
the
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developed
countries
nowaday
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nowadays
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 depending on the hydrational state of the plants ,which means if the plants are getting dry ,the water system will
automaticaly
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automatically
 open .
However
, with
this
 improvement, a huge number of
the
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indiveduals
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individuals
 around the
world
 especially in Africa are in starvation.The reasons
of
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this
 case
is
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 mainly
due to
 the
seriusly
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seriously
dameged
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damaged
 economy in these
countries
.
additionally
, the majority of these places are
controled
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controlled
 by the western
world
such
 as America and France.Not only the western
world
 controls these
countries
 ,but
also
 it
drain
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 its resources
as well as
 , the modern
technologyis
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technology is
 only exclusive to these
countries
 because
how
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of how
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 much it costs.All of
this
 directly or
in directly
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indirectly
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 leads to people in
hunger
. In order to solve or even
trying
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 to solve
this
 situation, a huge effort should be done,not only by the
countries
 suffering from
hunger
,
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but
also
from
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by
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 the capable ones. To illustrate, those places suffering from
this
 case should
adapt
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adopt
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 a new policy to save
its
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their
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 own people.
while
 the developed
countries
 should donate to those in
hunger
 especially
which
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those
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 caused by war.
to conclude
,with the environmental changes ,which
been
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have been
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 happening lately ,
any one
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anyone
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 might experience
hunger
 ,for so many reasons
that
is
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 why it should be considered
as
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apply
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a matter of humanity ,and it is solution should be on everyone’s
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. In order
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