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some people think that giving it to the poor countries has more negative impacts than a positive answer. do what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #countries #impacts
Indeed,
the
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wealth
is require
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to
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 each state and nation.
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, some
countries
 have richness
while
, other
countries
 have a basic problem as food,
water
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. Some people believe that
make
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 it to the poverty
governments
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government
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 has more negative influences
more
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than
a
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beneficial
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. Personally, I fully agree that because
the
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wealth is more significant for development. First and foremost, There are many
of
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problems
depend
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 on the
countries
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country's
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 economy
also
, where the state has
low
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a low
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 potential source, that condition
impact
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to
population
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the population
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 of
country
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the country
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 and the future of
government
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the government
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.
Moreover
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 the economy is essential
on
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 the political field.
For
example
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Africa
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African
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countries
 are poor for the reason they do not have any technological development and that
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a
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 issue
create
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the
Africa
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African
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 nations
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suffer from the poor. Nowadays, each country is
intend
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 the powerful
on
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in
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 the world.
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,
the
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poor
countries
are suffer
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are suffering
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 from
educational
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issue
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issues
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,
nevertheless
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 that problem impacts
to
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the
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most field like medical
investigate
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, social development, machine industry, agriculture and space technology.
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example
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 many researchers and journals are publishing
the
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article each year, so
the
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showing every country of level and
africa
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African
countries
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countries'
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last
 position in the chart.
In addition
,
the
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 weak educational level has
negative
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a negative
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 effect on human and impact
to
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the culture,
such
countries
 have
leg
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 in
over all
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 states. In conclusion, I would maintain that each nation has power because that situation
have
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an
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 negative effect on human and
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the human's
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human's
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 future. I hope every place
excellent
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 and has
own
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its own
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 especially
resource
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resources
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 but many companies and
the
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governments do not allow these resources
using
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to be used
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 for
people
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people's
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 future.
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