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The teaching situation of teachers and students in a classroom will no longer exist by the year of 2050.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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situation
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 of teachers and
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 in a classroom will no longer exist and I disagree with
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 opinion. on the one hand, the teaching
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 of teachers and
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 on the internet will exist by the year 2025,it may bring some advantages.
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,when
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study
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,it means they do not need to use the
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papers
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 on their iPad or computers,it is more eco-friendly for the environment.
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, it can promote the technology innovation because compies should improve their technology to avoid accidents happen in
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 ,it
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 can help country technological development.
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.the
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 disadvantages.
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, when
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 at their home,it will
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 so that
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their
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,it means they could not meet each other very
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 ,it is not
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benefits
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 with other
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 it is bad to improve their social skill,and it
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maintain
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friendship
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children use the
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computer
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 time ,it is bad for their eyesight
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easy
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 influenced by what they constantly see and listen
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government
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responsibility
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a responsibility
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 to protect children get away from
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 the teaching
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 no longer exist .
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