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Internet technology means people do not need to travel to foreign countries to understand how others live. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#internet #technology #people #travel #countries
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Undoubtedly, the
internet
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 has become a blessing among the
masses
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 and
this
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 technology brings more advantages to folks somewhere,
people
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 do not need to visit overseas nations to understand how foreign
people
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 live. I partially agree with the given statement and I will illustrate my viewpoints with appropriate examples and a conclusion. First and foremost, it is superior for individuals to watch other
countries
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 on the
internet
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.
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, if
people
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 will see foreign
countries
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 on electronic gadgets
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 they do not need to travel to other
countries
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 dint of
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, they can save
time
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 and money, because of the inflation, ticket prices are touching the sky day by day and many folks could not purchase tickets
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, the
internet
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 could help the
people
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 to save their capital and they can watch to other
countries
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 on the
internet
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.
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, nowadays, a lot of
masses
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 do blogging when they go to new
countries
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 and most of the crowd follows them on their channels, so it is a good idea to look at all the foreign nations by just sitting at home as those
people
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 post several videos on YouTube, Facebook or other social apps about the different aspects of new
countries
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.
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,
this
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 trend has some downsides. Because, if
people
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 will not visit overseas
countries
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then
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 they cannot enjoy different kinds of views with their naked eyes
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, and they cannot explore more knowledge about the culture and history of those
countries
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 because sometimes the
internet
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 does not provide accurate information.
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, if the
masses
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 will watch other
countries
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 with the help of the
internet
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then
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 they cannot spend a good
time
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 with their family members and
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, it will be boring
time
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 for their family to spend their all
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 in their own country and they could not enjoy special moments in foreign
countries
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.
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, I believe that the
internet
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 is a good opportunity for those folks who could not afford tickets but
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people
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 must prefer to go to other
countries
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 to see the national
masses
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 living standards as they can get more knowledge with their naked eyes than the
internet
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.
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