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The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live.

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live.
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The pie chart illustrates the country of birth of
people
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 residing in
Australia
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. and the table describes where
people
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 live in a rural area or city area depending on the delivery of these countries. The most impressive from the board is
Australia
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 is the highest leading country. At the same time, the Netherlands is the least country with birth
people
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 living in and
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, the majority of
people
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 preferred to live in cities area than in rural areas. The pie chart shows that almost three-quarters of the total population is born in
Australia
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, and only 7% were born in the UK. New Zealand, China, and the Netherlands born are between 3% and 1%. The table shows where the population of
Australia
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 lives.
People
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 born outside of
Australia
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 and New Zealand have the highest percentage of the population moving to cities, about 66% and 60%
while
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 they count the highest percentage of
people
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 living in rural areas among others, 17% and 20% respectively. Chinese reached the highest peak of 99% of them settling in cities.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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