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Question- A country’s future depends on its young people. Therefore, a country should invest heavily in its youth. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
this
 kind of various things going to happen's era, a
nation
 whether is glorious or developing slowly which is depends on the adolescent more. So I definitely totally support a country should put more power and suitable institute in the youngsters educational.
This
 essay will illustrate and analyse
this
 vital question about the young person between the
nation
 link.
First,
the child who does not reach the eighteenth is the majority group which must accept education.
Due to
 their mindsets and body is not being enough to
independent
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 and
having
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 the ability to live alone, they must have tons of curriculums and extra activities.
For
this
 reason, I suppose a country should focus on school education and invest heavily in
their
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 naive period.
Secondly
, a
nation
 that wants to become glomming and stronger can
ondepends
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on depends
depends
 the youth's growth quickly and enrich themselves. Because they have a younger blood to create new things or fresh ideas to push the contemporary process in many areas. If we don't invest in the younger generation these days, we will be abandoned for many years later and a
nation
 will be out
or
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 no competitive ability compares
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another
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countrycountry
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country country
 in the world. All in all, enlarging the educational power we can is what we need to improve the talent person groups and let them to developing the country which is the cleverest option.
Finally
, encouraging and caring
more
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 adolescents' hearts is important, likely, teaching them to learn more about the future of the world is necessary and compulsory.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innovative potential
  • Skilled workforce
  • Socioeconomic development
  • Civic engagement
  • Demographic neglect
  • Intergenerational equity
  • Sustainable investment
  • Youth empowerment
  • Long-term benefits
  • Public health initiatives
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