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In some countries an increasing number of children are overweight as a result of eating too much fast food. It is necessary for governments to ban selling this kind of food in schools. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, kids suffering from obesity
due to
 excess intake of fast
food
 is increasing an
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 alarming numbers.
According to
 many people
such
 kinds of
food
 shall not be allowed in schools for sale. I am of the strong opinion that it would be the right decision by the government if they put a sanction on the sale of
such
 eatables on the premises of educational institutions. I will try to give reasons to support my views in the following paragraphs with examples.
First,
the foremost reason to stop
such
food
 to be offered at school canteens is that it is very accessible to the youth. Families have gone from joint families to nuclear ones and there are even single parents as well.
Therefore
,
due to
this
 , a phenomenon most of the parents are working and they do not have adequate time to prepare a healthy meal for their wards to take along to school.
Thus
, pupils are totally dependent on the meals at the mess. So they will intake whatever is more convenient for them. As a
,
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result they are kind of forced to take whatever is available. If canteens start serving traditional nutritional
food
instead
 of fast
food
then
 there is a possibility it will change in habits of the students for good.
Secondly
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