The graphs below show the size of the ozone hole over Antarctica and the production of three ozone-damaging gases from 1980 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the size of the ozone hole over Antarctica and the production of three ozone-damaging gases from 1980 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
To begin
, the line graphs provide information on how the size of the ozone hole in Square Km (in thousands) over Antarctica changed over a 20-year period of
time
and the amount of ozone-damaging gases released in Tonnes (in millions) during the same
time
.
Firstly
, the size of the hole increased significantly from 1980 to up until 1990 showing a value of approximately 2,000,000 Square Km even though, around 1993 a considerable decline in the trend can be observed.
Furthermore
, until 2000 the size of the hole had gotten bigger when it peaked at 4,000,000Sq.Km
giving
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the largest number in that duration of 20 years. The second graph outlines how much of the three main ozone-damaging gases were released in the above-mentioned
time
range. CFC-11 was at its peak back in 1980 emitting around 70 million Tonnes
while
20 years later it shows a decreasing trend continuously
while
CFC-12 illustrates the opposite of that growing gradually overtime within the
time
frame.N2O started producing back in 1990 unlike the other two gases and it
also
shows a growth.
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