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Some people believe that it would be beneficial if employees worked three or four days per week rather than five or six days. Why is this? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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These
days
 public debates have been going over whether is better to
work
 three or four
days
 a
week
instead
 of five or six
days
. It strikes me that three
days
 off a
week
 would be more profitable in terms of economy and well-being, and
also
 I am going to support my assertion with the following reasons. First of all,
work
days
,
however
, considered 6 or a maximum of 8
hours
 a day at
work
, and coming back home barely counted as free time non-official
hours
. For better understanding, imagine a mother whose job is teaching. Barely leisure time it might be, she commonly has to do household and child care if would not have something relating to her job,
such
 as exam paper correction. In
this
 circumstance, the burnout rate is high, five or six
days
 a
week
 16 or 17
hours
 working.
Secondly
, being at
work
 is not just about service to customers, everyday
work
 imposes on the
work
 community at marginal costs which are not ignorable in the long term.
For instance
, transport costs for employees,
on the other hand
, utility costs for corporations for air conditioners and heating devices in summer and winter.
In addition
, both mentioned expenditures results in air pollution which is a major issue and involves the population in a defective cycle of the more the income the worse the life condition!
Whereas
, people
work
 in other to have better lives. Having suggested both sides of the argument, I am convinced that society and the government can be beneficiaries of fewer
work
days
 per
week
 and increased
work
hours
 per day. Maybe it is time to let go of our previous beliefs,
that is
 to say, biases, about
work
days
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • productive
  • workplace stress
  • employee well-being
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon emissions
  • traffic congestion
  • flexibility
  • personal interests
  • implementation
  • workload
  • customer service
  • business operations
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