The flow chart illustrates the consequences of deforestation. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The flow chart illustrates the consequences of deforestation. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The flow chart shows
the
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information about cutting down forests.
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, there stand out four
the
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main
problem
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problems
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are caused
deforestation
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by deforestation
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, which leads to floods and less biodiversity.
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, knocking down trees in a forest can cause fewer roots are holding the
top
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topsoil
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soil
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, which
leat
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lead
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to erosion of
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soil
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the soil
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.
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, deforestation can
increased
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risk
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the risk
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of
fair
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fire
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, both deliberate and accidental ones, leading to demolish waste of wood and
Micro-organisms
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microorganisms
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feeding on waste.
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, it can
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result in drought
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less precipitation caused by less amount of warm which plants return to
air
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the air
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. All of
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this problem
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these problems
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can lead to
rise
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the rise
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of pioneer species and
degradation
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the degradation
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of vegetation, eventually leading to less biodiversity.
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, heavy
logginf
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logging
equepment
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equipment
using
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for clearing the forest can compress the
soil
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, which becomes hard and baked.
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this
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rain water runs off from the
soil
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.
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Finally
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it can
leading
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to floods
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words soil with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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