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Traffic congestion is becoming increasigly problematic in major cities. What solution can you suggest to help solve the problem.

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A large number of capital cities are witnesses to proliferating traffic jams. Personally, I presume
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 subject could be eliminated if people considered some tiny observations.
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 essay will go on to offer some practical solutions to the mentioned crisis.
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 with, in many cases the stuck road time is exactly on the rush hour.
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, if there was distinctive work time for the banks, schools, and companies, the traffic congestion would be eliminated or at least dwindle. As an example of
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 case, schools open at 9 A.M, banks have started to work at 7 o'clock, and office workers would
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 initiate to their job at 10. These minor changes could bring huge enhancements regarding the mentioned problem.
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, the infrastructure of the transport system could have an immense impact on crowds or quiet routes. Obviously, the more equipped the transport system the easier the transfer.
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, driving your own car to the workplace, especially on a foggy or rainy morning may seem desirable at
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considering the hustle and bustle of bumper-to-bumper vehicles, on the opposite spectrum, is discouraging. In conclusion, people in large cities are struggling with crowded streets commuting from one point to a destination every day. Logically, overcoming
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 issue demands recognition between the community and governors.
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, individuals should imply some changes in their habits and lifestyles, including the method of short trips.
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, the government should invest more in public transportation and
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 have to review some old regulations.
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