In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
Purchasing homes is assumed to be the preliminary step of welcoming new births of a family in most Asian nations. The demand for housing keeps growing, particularly in city centres. In the following essay, I
would
elaborate on the cause behind Wrong verb form
will
this
situation and explain why I believe it has detrimental impacts on house purchasers.
The main reason that drives families to buy a home, instead
of renting a temporary one, is a lack of security in renting living places. House
renting market in Taiwan is said to be unfriendly to the consumers, families with kids Correct article usage
The house
in particular
. For example
, the current living houses can be recalled by the landlords anytime, as long as they need to sell or use them themselves. It would be difficult for little kids to accustomed
to the new environment, especially when it comes to school transition.
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be accustomed
However
, I disagree with the idea of buying a home because of the heavy burden of it. Purchasing a housing estate is never an easy deal and even brings negative impacts on the purchasers. The deepest concern is that the mortgage can eat up a family's savings. Under such
financial pressure, something is most likely to be sacrificed, like recreational activities, or the tuition fees for children. For instance
, one of my friends, who likes to share her outfits on social media, is suffering from house loans. She has no choice but to give up buying cosmetics and beautiful clothing. I've never seen her selfies on Instagram since she bought the new apartment. Clearly, buying houses can change one's buying habits severely and make them have little choice to buy the things they like.
In summary, although
owning a home can help with easing
the anxieties of being made to leave the place you live suddenly, it can bring much frustration and stress Wrong verb form
ease
while
facing a shortage of money. Therefore
, I opined that spending on living spaces should be considered more carefully.Submitted by qooe212156822000 on
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task response
Ensure that the essay fully addresses all aspects of the prompt, including both the reasons for the importance of owning a home and whether this is a positive or negative situation.
coherence and cohesion
Work on providing a clear introduction and conclusion that effectively summarize the main points of the essay. The introduction should also introduce the main reasons for the importance of owning a home, and the conclusion should provide a definitive stance on whether this is a positive or negative situation.