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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visits such places?

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 spots that contain extremist natural conditions are gaining popularity nowadays.
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 visitors could create
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 regions, it may put them at potential risks, including natural disasters, and the disease derived from unfamiliar weather.
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 with, there are various perks of travelling to
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 with tough situations, in which tourists are able to appreciate stunning views like nowhere,
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 as waterfalls in the jungle of Amazone, which is the home of thousands and millions of
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 species, providing chances for visitors to expand their horizons.
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, it could stop the deterioration of pollution by fostering awareness of environmental protection during the trips to
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 displaying masterpieces completed by mother earth.
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, others believe that it is not worth trading in
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 health for new experiences, since it may cause irreversible results.
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,a growing number of people are keen to challenge themselves by climbing jade mountain, which is one of the highest mountains in Taiwan,
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, it could cause a few concerns regarding the unstable weather and narrow roads, which led to safety hazards,
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 as accidents caused
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 the lack of safety facilities. On top of that, dramatic distinct in temperature between day and night will affect blood pressure and lead to correlative diseases.
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, there are pros and cons for people visiting rural
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 with unusual geographic conditions.
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 the acquisition of new experiences could be considered as one of the benefits, reversedly, people travelling in those
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 may suffer from sicknesses.
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