The line graph compares the daily travel of British commuters using three different vehicles from 1970 to 2030.

The line graph compares the daily travel of British commuters using three different vehicles from 1970 to 2030.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph compares the daily travel of British commuters using three different vehicles from 1970 to 2030.
The given graph illustrates the
number
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of UK
people
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who commute
everyday
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by 3 different types of transportation over a course of 60 years, starting from 1970.
Overall
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, the figures for daily UK commuters travelling by
car
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and train grow considerably,
while
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the
number
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of
bus
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users
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witnesses a slight drop over the period shown.
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,
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car
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the car
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remains the most favoured mode of transportation. It can be seen that
car
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users
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always outnumber those who adopt others. In 1970, the
number
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of
people
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driving
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car
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a car
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to work was over 5
million
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,
while
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it was about 4
million
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of
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apply
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people
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using
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the bus
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bus
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buses
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and 3
million
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of
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apply
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railway passengers.
However
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, from 2010 to 2020, the
number
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of train commuters increased significantly (approximately reaching 4
million
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in 2020)
that
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which
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make
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makes
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bus
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the bus
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the least
preffered
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preferred
transportation of all with less than 3.5
million
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users
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. From 2020 to 2030, it is anticipated that the trend of
3
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the 3
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figures will still stay unchanged. On the one hand, the
number
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of
people
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who commute by
car
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is predicted to continue to rise
substaintially
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substantially
and
finally
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reach its peak of 9
million
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in 2030. In terms of other
transportations
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transportation
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, in 2030, the predictions express that the
number
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of railway passengers will end up as the runner-up,
while
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bus
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users
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will experience the least
number
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(about 5
million
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and 3
million
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respectively).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, car, bus, users, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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