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The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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The production of new items and objects
have
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 been a
well discussed
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 topic recently in our society. Many people explain that the growth of
world
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the world
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 economy has brought harmful
effect
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effects
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in
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 the atmosphere.
Nonetheless
, others argue that it is necessary the creation of new goods
as well as
 services. In
this
 essay, I am going to
analize
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analyze
analyse
 the issue of new things, and
at the end
, I will give possible solutions
of
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 these problems. On one hand, undoubtedly, it is a reality that new goods have helped to increase
the
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air pollution.
For example
: In the
last
 years, the population has been increasing dramatically.
Therefore
, we need more products in order to
conservate
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conserve
 the life quality. As result, we demand more services and items
such
 as clothes, cars, and food
thus
 we produce more pollution
along with
 garbage. Under these
circumstances
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 our environment was damaged
for
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 the increase
of
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 new products.
In addition
, many animals are dying out for the destruction of their natural ecosystem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production
  • consumer goods
  • natural environment
  • damage
  • causes
  • overconsumption
  • demand
  • environmental regulations
  • enforcement
  • natural resources
  • industrial pollution
  • waste
  • inadequate
  • waste management practices
  • public awareness
  • education
  • sustainable alternatives
  • stricter environmental laws
  • recycling
  • responsible consumption
  • clean technologies
  • renewable energy
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