the plans below show the layout of the groundfloor of a museum in 1990 and 2010

The two plans show that there were a number of small but important changes to the ground floor of a museum between 1990 and 2010. The general design remained the same with the entrance

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used for different purposes. The most noticeable alternation was the removal of the Archaeology Gallery.

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was replaced with two new areas: a poster display space and a children's interactive zone. The Natural History and Local History rooms stayed the same size and in the same location, but one wall of the latter was knocked down, making it more open. The museum office was unchanged but the reception counter was enlarged and moved closer to the entrance. The original gift shop was expanded to include a Cafe. The statue which in 1990 was next to the staircase was moved to the centre of the floor. A lift was added in the space between the gift shop and the Natural History room.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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the plans below show the layout of the groundfloor of a museum in 1990 and 2010

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more and more people want to move to big cities. why is that ? what extent is the good trend?

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Some believe that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or health club while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is enough. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think the best way to stay fit is joining a gym/helath club while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is sufficient. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose art (e.g. literature), and boys tend to choose science subjects (e.g. physics). Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed?