Some people think that it is the responsibility of governments to take care of the environment, while others believe that it is the responsibility of the citizens. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The world we live in continues to deteriorate at an unprecedented rate, yet we continue to exploit
nature
and cause more problems to the environment. Some people argue that the
government
has the utmost responsibility to resolve
this
, but others believe that all citizens should contribute to taking care the
nature
. I agree that all of us have to participate in maintaining
nature
.
However
, the greatest responsibility falls on the
shoulder
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of our
government
.
To begin
with, major environmental issues
such
as pollution and greenhouse
gasses
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emissions are attributed to
humans
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human
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activites
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activities
. Air conditioning houses, car emissions, and good
productions
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are to name a few factors contributing to environmental problems.
Therefore
, every citizen should take action to promote the health and safety of our surroundings
such
as using public transport or bikes to go to work or school
instead
of driving their cars.
On the other hand
, the
government
has much more authority and resources to reduce damage to
nature
that is
caused by human hands. Providing good and sufficient public transport is pivotal to decreasing gas emissions from private cars. The
government
may
also
pass a law about
nature
preservation and give tax exemptions to citizens who regularly use public transport or electric cars/bikes.
In addition
, the
government
could take action
on reducing
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the use of fossil fuels and
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it
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to greener energy resources
such
as solar or geothermal power. In conclusion, I believe that
although
all humans should contribute to
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nature
, it is the
government
that has the greatest responsibility as they have the resources and authority to do more for the earth.
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Ensure that all points directly address the essay prompt and fully develop each aspect of the task. Provide a clear opinion and ensure that both views are discussed thoroughly.
coherence cohesion
Use cohesive devices to connect ideas within and between paragraphs. Ensure that there is a clear progression of ideas and that the essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that summarize the main points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable practices
  • environmental protection
  • grassroots movements
  • community-led initiatives
  • policy implementation
  • regulations
  • funding
  • innovative solutions
  • collective effort
  • advocate
  • enforce laws
  • energy-efficient
  • reduce waste
  • recycling
  • sustainable outcomes
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