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In some countries more and more people are becoming interested in finding out bout the history of the house or building they live in.

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In the nature of human beings, there is always an urge which is named
as
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a
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curiosity. We wonder about our origin and the place’s
history
 in which we live. Nowadays, in some cultures more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the
history
 of their houses. There are some reasons for it like a desire for our past and the
ways
 that can be researched by talking to parents or some other resources. The reason why we are so interested in the
history
 of our buildings is the commitment that we possess.
To begin
 with , we link
to
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our future with
past
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the past
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 because we are curious creatures.
In addition
, we want to know about our childhood and
past
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 of our house. We want to know whether some important people lived or
any
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whether any
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 vital events occurred
in
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there.
Moreover
, some people think that there is a link between
history
 and our
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like
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personality. They assume that past events are associated with the behaviour
which
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the
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they
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 have.
On the other hand
, there are some
ways
 to reach a clear finding via our grandparents. We can ask them about the
history
 because they saw these periods of time and they have so much experience and information about it.
Moreover
, if we do not have any parents who know
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 time, we can read and examine the
history
 books or we can search on the internet.
Although
 the past cannot be brought back, we can just gain information in these
ways
. All in all, curiosity in the human brain is an undeniable fact and
also
 wanting to know about
history
as
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 natural as
a
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curiosity. We can use these
ways
 to dispose
our
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 urges and gain information about our
history
.
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