the tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

the tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
The numbers that are in
below
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tables illustrate the
sales
of Fairtrade of two products which are from coffee and bananas in two years 1999 and 2004 in five different countries that are
UK
,
Switzerland
, Denmark, Belgium and
sweden
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Sweden
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.
Overall
, the
UK
had the highest
sales
of coffee.
However
, among others, Sweden had the least
sales
. But, for bananas,
Switzerland
sold
the
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most of
it
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them
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, and Denmark sold the least. For coffee
product
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products
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, in 1999
Switzerland
sold 3
million
Euros
and had
the
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first
place
, But in 2004 sold 6
million
Euros
that took third
place
. the second country in 1999 was Denmark with under 2
million
Euros
. But after 5 years just added 200 thousand which reached 2
million
Euros
with second
place
. In 2004
Uk
had the highest
sales
among others with 20
million
Euros
.
By comparison
in
1999
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the
UK
sold 1.5
million
Euros
which was a sharp growth.
Also
, in 2004 among
others
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Sweden and Belgium could sell just 1 and 1.7
million
Euros
respectively. For banana products,
Switzerland
in 2004 and 1999 sold 62
million
Euros
overall
, which was the highest.
However
,
this
number for the second and third
place
(
UK
and Belgium) were about 6.5 and 4
million
Euros
respectively and for other
countries
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these numbers were just under 3
million
Euros
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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